I have good memories of my days in High School. In my first grade , I was 15 years old. I had a lot of friends. In this period, I met my boyfriend,he is a wonderful man. Currently, I have a relationship of four years, and I´m still with him.
I had good notes ,for this reason I accomplished a scholarship.
In my first year , I met Karina. She is my best friend now. She is very intelligent and she study medicine at Instituto Politecnico Nacional. We used to play the guitar, practice yoga and zumba. Therefore, we were unforgettable.
The second year was the most important for me because I participated in the Oratory Contest. In this event I won a trip to ; los Pinos , el Senado de la Republica ,Camara de Diputados y Senadores and a laptop. After that , I used to practice my vocabulary to improve this and win the next years again.
My last year in High School was sad because I didn't want to go out. The second Oratory Contest started so I decided to participate again.
My boyfriend and I participated together because the roots of changed, and in that moment there was " Public Debate" . The event was very difficult but with all our effort ,this time we won together.
In that moment there wasn't a trip , we only won $1000 each one.
Hello! I think it is better to substitute some parts for other ones. For example:
ResponderBorrarIn the part where you said that you met your boyfriend, it is better to refer him with a relative clause, I mean "I met my boyfriend WHO is a wonderful man"
Also, I prefer you write "I am in a four years relationship and counting..."
The other part is "I used to practice my vocabulary to improve this for win again the fllowing years"
And i think those are the bigger problems I detected in your essay.
Take care!