Four years ago, I went to Acapulco with my brother. We
stayed there just for two days. We visited the Quebrada, the downtown, the
cathedral and the sea. The weather was perfect and freezing because the sun
shone all day long, and my brother and I, did something that we had planned.
The food was absolutely delicious we ate fried fish with salad, and shrimp in
garlic sauce. We really enjoyed the food!
After that, we went to visit the Quebrada, in that
place there were many divers, and the scenery was really wonderful. That place
was my favorite because I found a handsome man. His name was Eduardo, I knew
his name because he had a badge on such as then My brother asked him, if he was not afraid to jump
from very high heights,and he just replied:
“-No, I love doing it, it is my hobby”
We were there until night after that we returned
to the hotel.
The next morning, we bought many souvenirs for our
friends for example T- shirts, pens and boats.
I loved visiting Acapulco, and I would love to return
again.
Hi =) I think in the fourth line it's not necessary to put a "comma" but maybe you should put it in " We were there until the night, after that ´´´´´ Good night !! =)
ResponderBorrarthank you dani =)
ResponderBorrarhi diana.
ResponderBorrarwell amm you might consider to use a dot after the phrase: all day long in the fisrts paragraph and continue with the next, or use a link like (s,o instead of and ) if it was the idea.
i consider, you can use an adverb of frequency after this phrase: he had a badge on. an adverb such as then; because i think is the same topic. Also chec the punctuation afte: "we were there until the night" .
never give up Diana you are doing it well!